My revised thesis statement for Essay 1 is "Japanese education is required to be overlooked, because; Disputes about fabrication are kept unsolved, There are possibilities that fabrication could cause another racism, and Education is the primal of being involved in these issues.", and the three main supporting ideas for this thesis are as follows.
The first supporting point for my thesis is "Disputes about fabrication are kept unsolved". For example, education about history has many disputes such as "Kyokasho Ronsou". Also, there are groups that claims many media are fabricating about the WW2. Second supporting point for my thesis is "There are possibilities that fabrication could cause another racism". For example, as a counter reaction to many fabricated news, there are waves of Nationalism and Exclusivism. Third supporting point for my thesis is and "Education is the primal of being involved in these issues".Without basic knowledge about issues, and also, a understanding(does not have to be sympathy) of each view about the issues, it is impossible to make a good evaluation, and give an reasonable opinion of the issues.